At the first day of May, seven years ago, at exactly eight o'clock, a girl made her birthday wish. She wouldn't tell anyone, but she wished everything would change. Espesially her older brother's best friend's feelings towards her; she was ten whole years old after all.
She looked around the moment before she blew the candles out, her eyes pausing at her mother and father, they were holding hands, smiling at their little girl. She didn't notice the new gray streaks in her mother's hair, or the fresh wrinkles on her father's forehead, mysterious signs of early aging. Her brother, Kellen, and his best friend, Darlow, were leaning in, practically over her birthday cake in anticipation of her blowing out the candles. The neighbor's daughter, Fate, was sitting beside her, her face also lit up with excitement.
The whole moment was magical. The stars dimly gleaming in the new purple darkness, as the afternoon cicadas sang a last goodnight. Everyone she loved was around her picnic table, waiting for her to blow out the candles on her blue birthday cake. And when Claire finally blew out the fire, only one thing was on her mind: change.
Very short for a first chapter :P but very well written!! 10 years old seems a bit young to be expecting a relationship already but you paint the story really well and I like the part where it points out the aging of her parents as it makes it all more real somehow. You're very good at leading the reader as the events unfold. Lots of description but not to much you're quite a natural at writing! :)
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